Tuesday, June 2

Developing POV to Develop Voice

By Pamela Fagan Hutchins, @PamelotH

Part of the How They Do It Series

Voice is a critical (and often elusive) aspect of a novel. We all know it when we read it, but what's the best way to find those character voices? Pamela Fagan Hutchins is here today to share some tips on how to do that, using one of my favorite writing tools--point of view.

Pamela writes award-winning and bestselling romantic mysteries and hilarious nonfiction, chairs the board of the Houston Writers Guild, and dabbles in employment law and human resources investigations from time to time. She is passionate about great writing, smart authorpreneurship, and her two household hunks, husband Eric and one-eyed Boston terrier Petey. She blogs on writing, publishing, and promotion at Skip the Jack and on her beleaguered family and much-too-personal life at Road to Joy. She also leaps medium-tall buildings in a single bound, if she gets a good running start. Check out her latest mystery, Heaven to Betsy (Emily #1), available online everywhere.

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Take it away Pamela...

Recently an editor posed a question on Facebook: Do you think about and work on voice ahead of time for your novels?

It was an interesting question for me, because when I think of voice, I think of the writer’s unique style, which, IMHO, the writer develops 15% through education, 35% through innate ability, and 50% through practice, practice, practice (in fact, I believe it takes hundreds of thousands of words to discover voice, and a lifetime to pursue its perfection). The editor, however, was referring to the voice of the characters, and I associate those with point of view. Whatever you call it, that’s what I want to talk about today: point of view and how it gives a distinct voice to characters.
Caveat: you might get a different answer from your MFA professor, but that’s OK. My purpose in writing this is to capture my process, in case it helps someone else. I don’t have an MFA, but I do have a small library of bestselling and award-winning books, which just means I’ve killed a lot of trees, and that some readers think I know how to do this writing thing, and the readers are who I write for. If my methodology and thinking doesn’t work for you, then there’re lots of other folks you can turn to without hurting my feelings, and that’s what you should do. 
The short answer to the editor’s question is that I don’t think consciously about voice ahead of time, but I do think about point of view. A lot. For each of the novels I have written, I have thought about point of view for months—and talked about it, and for most of my novels, outlined it/synopsized it/character studied it—so that when I begin to write I already know my POV character (and others) very well, and they’ve started having conversations with other characters in the book in my head. Because I know where they are from and who their parents are and who they hung out with growing up and who they idolized as a child and what educational level they obtained—and how they felt about intelligence/education/self-presentation and much more, like their favorite underwear, what smells bug them, what they watch on TV, how often they shave their legs, etc.—I know what they sound like. Their accents. Their mannerisms. Their pet phrases. Their hot buttons.

Possibly because of that, the voices—especially of the POV character (or characters)—come out as soon as I start writing. That doesn’t mean they’re perfect, because it may take a hundred thousand words or more before I get a few of them just right, and a revision (or five) to bring the rest of them in line. Sometimes I write things authentic to their POVs and how they sound that are extraneous to the story. In those passages I record things I have heard them say, how they said it, to whom, and the context within which they said it. These scenes unfold as I faithfully write the book to match the story playing in my head. The writing of these things helps me establish them as a character, even if I later have to delete them. And often I later have to delete them. That’s OK. The character develops as I write them, and makes the rest of the book better.

I like to write in first person because I like to get very intimate with a character. I have also been told that I as a writer have a very distinct voice. I’m on my third multi-book series, each with a different first person protagonist. So it’s important that each of my first person protagonists sounds unique and true to herself, even as each brings a piece of me with them.

To create this, I have to get deep down and dirty with the POV character. For instance, in Heaven to Betsy (Emily #1), I needed a way for Emily to say someone looked hungrily at someone else. I mentioned that to my husband because I was stuck at the moment, and vocalizing it to him helped me change my paradigm from sitting silently and thinking about it. His answer was outside of the context of point of view: “hyena.” That made me think of “wolf,” which also felt completely outside of Emily’s POV. She grew up as a rodeo kid in the Panhandle of Texas, and she spent lots of time outside, and on the prairie. I sat and thought about her days as a child, and where she spent them, and what she’d seen there, and how it impacted her until a picture formed in my mind that I knew was real.

Ultimately, I went with this:
“She’d looked at Jack a moment ago like a red-tailed hawk I’d once seen lock eyes on a rabbit seconds before snatching it into the sky, twenty feet from where I sat daydreaming in summer grass.”
I guess what I am saying here is that, for me, Emily’s experiences impact POV choices which ultimately comes into my voice expressing her voice, whether that voice is the one in her head or her verbalizations.

Emily also says things like this:
She was as shallow as a Texas river in August.”

“My research was as gappy as the hair on a mangy dog.”

“My moods were as up and down as the Dallas Cowboys.”
Emily sounds like this when she describes her mother:
“She beamed at me, reflecting a vision of what I would look like in twenty-five years, if genetics trumped will: Indecently long legs made even longer by stilettos, better-than-medium height, round blue eyes, and dewy, Mary Kay-slathered skin going crepe-y at the edges. She’d fit her trim body—thicker through the middle—in a snug dress slightly less long than was proper for her age, and was wearing the best blonde that money could buy from the shelves of Walmart. Trailer park meets the Southern church lady—that was my mother.”
From where I sit this makes her distinct from my earlier protagonists, Katie and Michele. Katie, the daughter of a north Texas Sunday School teacher and Dallas Police Chief, is more educated than Emily, but more fragile, and she cares much more about “things.” Michele, whose Caucasian mother annoys her and whose Mexican veterinarian father is her hero, is insecure about her looks and her uptight nature, and tries to control the world and the words around her. This impacts what each woman thinks, what she chooses to say and not say, what she blurts out in her weakest moments, her accent, her self-confidence, the life experiences she has to relate current events to, the length/complexity/syntax of her sentences, her word choices, and even her accent. I couldn’t tell you what exactly makes Katie sound like Katie or Michele sound like Michele, I just know that Emily sounds like Emily, because I got to know her very well before I wrote her, and then stayed as true to her as I could.

In a nutshell, for me, it is all about preparation, and letting the characters develop over time before I attempt them, then remaining true to who they are and their own histories as their scribe. Also, it’s about writing it absolutely as fast as I can so I stay in “voice” and “POV.” I really stink it up if I put it down and come back later multiple times, unless I have reached a stuck state where I accept the inevitability of a MAJOR rewrite (which is fine if it needs it). Even then, I just have to become the character and live in her world until the story ends, for that second (or third or fourth or fifth) time.

About Heaven to Betsy

When a dead body swan-dives from a balcony into the pool at a wedding, gossip comes to a halt about disgraced paralegal and former rodeo queen Emily—whose husband left her for a woman who turns out to be a man. Enter Jack, a secretive attorney and sexy mix of cowboy and Indian. She refuses to work for him, until she learns about the disappearance of the six-year old daughter of his notorious client Sofia, the wedding shooter, who is also an illegal immigrant. Emily feels a strange affinity with the girl and launches a desperate search for her. Bodies pile up in her wake across Texas and New Mexico as the walls around her own secrets begin to crumble, and the authorities question whether the child is anything but a figment of her imagination.

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  1. Excellent post, Pamela! Between your very helpful, detailed advice, with examples, and the book description, you've just attracted a new fan and reader! Heaven to Betsy looks intriguing, and I know the characters will feel authentic, so I'm off to buy it now!

  2. Thank you Jodie, and thanks to Janice and Fiction University!

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  4. Wow. This is one of the best posts I've ever read on voice. I work very similar to you, Pamela, so maybe I'm doing something right after all.

  5. Pamela, you are a master at POV, and at sharing your process. Good on you.

  6. To tell the truth, I don't know why a person, especially as editor, would ask that question if I'm understanding it right. I'm assuming that the editor was talking about projected personality. Without the personality of each character, you might as well have cardboard as characters.