These diagnostics are used as a teaching tool to provide examples and advice in actual works in progress. I focus on the question(s) asked, and analyze the submission as it pertains to that question or questions. It's not a traditional critique, it's about answering the writer's question(s) and letting them know if they're doing it right, wrong, and what they can do to improve that technique.
Real Life Diagnostics runs on Saturdays and random Sundays when my schedule permits.
The rules for submitting are pretty simple:
- Be willing to have your work and my comments posted publicly on the site.
- Submit 250 words of your work (give or take). A few extra sentences to finish a scene is fine. If you'd like to provide an explanation to understand the scene, that's fine, too, and it doesn't count in the 250 words. A little background information usually helps me with my critique since I know what you're trying to do.
- Ask a specific question about writing. For example, if you're not sure if you're showing or telling, or you want to know if you're doing point of view correctly. The question needs to be something that I can diagnose and talk about, so no, "Is this good writing?" type questions please. That's subjective and I can't help others there. However, "Does this opening work?" is fine. "Does this scene work?" is also fine. I can pinpoint why a scene does or doesn't work and offer helpful feedback there.
- Say what your market or genre is. What works for YA romance is a bit different than what an adult thriller needs.
- E-mail to janice (at) JaniceHardy (dot) com with "RL Diagnostics" as the subject line. Just paste the submission into the body of the email.
And that's it. Submitters are welcome to revise and resubmit if they'd like, but they don't have to. Revisions will be posted in the original post.
If you'd like to revise and resubmit that's okay. Just let me know it's a revision, and please add the link to the original post so I can find it more easily.
A sampling of Real Life Diagnostic articles:
- Crafting a Strong Beginning With a Young Narrator
- Figuring Out Why a Scene Doesn't Work
- A Look at a Middle Grade Query Letter