A Long Time Ago in a Story Far, Far Away...
I've written many a word that never made it into the final draft, not because they were badly written words, but because it was me figuring things out about the story or a character. Sometimes we need to let the ideas pour from our heads and see where they go, like brainstorming on paper. The trouble starts if we try to keep all those brainstorming words in the final text. While some might work just fine, most of them can usually be stuck in our NOTES folder.
When you write a prologue, look back and decide if you really need that actual scene, or if you were just clarifying your thoughts. Does it...
Show a critical piece of the protag's history that plays a vital role in the story?
If so, there's a a better than average chance that this is more for your benefit than the reader's. This is probably your protag's motivating secret, flaw, or past shame. This event shaped them as a person and plays a huge role in how they see themselves and the world around them. It's probably something they have to overcome or face, very likely part of their internal character arc. But it probably doesn't belong at the start of the story, even though you needed to write it to fully understand what's driving your protag.
Instead, look for ways to hint at this past that directly affect the opening scene:
- What quirks or behaviors might have resulted because of this past?
- What fears can you show that are relevant to what's going on in the preset day?
- What stimuli in the present day might trigger a past memory?
- What memories might cloud the current judgment of your protag?
- What single scar (physical or emotional) is your protag still carrying from that event you might show?
Show a critical piece of the world's history that plays a vital role in the story?
If you're writing fantasy or science fiction, you're probably fleshing out your world building and pinpointing that major moment that set the plot events in motion. While it's good for you to know these things, the reader won't really care. They're interested in the characters about to be slammed by these events.History only matters when it plays a role in something readers care about, and until they meet and bond with a characters, those details are just words.
Instead, look for ways to show the results of this history in the opening scene:
- What customs resulted because of this event?
- What myths evolved that might be apparent in how people act?
- Are there any foreshadowing details that can hint at what's coming?
- Are there any forbidden elements that are still practiced today?
- Did any slang term or common sayings result from this history?
Show a critical piece of information about a non-protag character that plays a vital role in the story?
Perhaps it's the antag, or the love interest, or some character that holds a key piece of info the protag needs to win. Writing out these scenes can help you understand who this key player is and how they fit into the tale. But seeing the scene probably isn't critical for the reader, and often spoils the surprise and kills the tension.
Instead, look for ways to build mystery about this person as the story unfolds:
- How does this person feel about your protag? Your antag?
- What hints can you leave that would suggest this scene?
- Where might this person's plan be used to complicate your protag's plan?
- When would be the worst moment for your protag to find out about this person and their plan?
- When is a good moment for this person to reveal that they're up to something and up the tension?
Try this article for more on determining if you really need that prologue or not.


































6 comments:
I see the value in this kind of self-test, and in any time writing about the world. Again, an unused prologue could even be published in the extras you suggested at the last post but one, or at a blog. I like the idea that all kinds of 'non-canon' elements of a fictional world could be kicking around, and this is very suggestive of the fictional polycosmos concept.
There were great answers to ask yourself when it comes to a prologue. They can be a place for infodump and putting in all those worldbuilding details you slaved over!
I have a prologue in my WIP, but it's only a paragraph long that describes the aftermath of an event that is key to the story. I didn't want it to be pages long (because those types of prologues really turn me off!) but give the reader just enough to get ready for the story.
Porky: It would be good for a website treat. I might have to look into adding some once the whole series is out there.
M.McGriff: There are prorogues out there that work very well. Shorter does seem to be a key factor in the ones that work.
You put this so well. Great exercise. So much of what we write in the first draft is for ourselves--introducing the character to ourselves. But for beginning writers, it's hard to let go of any words they've actually got down on paper. This might help. Thanks for another great post.
Nice! Helpful. I just finished my WiP so now I'm contemplating that fantasy novel I wrote the prologue to, then ditched for greener pastures/ideas. I don't think I need the prologue, really. Like you said--incorporate the ideas in later. :)
Anne: It's not always easy for experienced writers either, LOL. Thanks!
Carol: Exactly. But they do get the wheels turning sometimes. As they say, no writing is ever wasted.
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