How we punctuate dialogue tells our readers how to read that dialogue. We can show pauses, questions, interruptions, who’s speaking and how they’re doing it. It’s a useful tool for telling our stories.
If it’s been a while since you were in a classroom, or you’re new to writing and still figuring out the rules of dialogue, let’s look at some common questions for punctuating dialogue in a story.
First, some general dialogue rules:
- Dialogue is opened and closed by quotation marks: “I’ll be in the car.”
- Start a new paragraph for each speaker.
- If the dialogue is a new thought, start a new paragraph. This is seen mostly when we have a paragraph of narrative, then some dialogue. If the dialogue is part of the narrative, it can often stay in that paragraph, but if it’s a different thought or topic, it gets its own paragraph. For example:
It wasn’t as if she liked being first in the car every time, she just got ready faster. Hardly her fault, right? They didn’t have to take that tone with her. She crossed her arms and glared at them. “Who cares if I’m the first one out?”
It wasn’t as if she liked being first in the car every time, she just got ready faster. Hardly her fault, right? They didn’t have to take that tone with her.
“You guys going or what?” she asked.
1. Where Does the Punctuation Go?
Since dialogue is often part of a sentence, it can be tricky knowing if it needs a period or a comma. If the dialogue continues into the tag (the text that shows who’s speaking) you’d use a comma:
“I’ll be in the car,” Bob said, heading for the door.
Bob said, heading for the door isn’t its own sentence. The two parts of this sentence work together, so they’d need a comma. But if they were two separate sentences, you’d use a period.
“I’ll be in the car.” Bob headed for the door.
Bob headed for the door isn’t dependent on “I’ll be in the car” to understand it. This is the same whether you use said Bob or Bob said.
“I’ll be in the car,” Bob said, heading for the door.
“I’ll be in the car,” said Bob, heading for the door.
For dialogue that comes after the tag, the same rules apply.
Bob headed for the door and said, “I’ll be in the car.”
Jane looked at her and said, “he told me he’d be in the car.”
Bob headed for the door. “I’ll be in the car.”
Question marks and exclamation points also work the same way. Is it part of the same sentence, or a different sentence? The difference here is whether or not you’d capitalize the first word after the dialogue.
“Is Bob in the car?” she said, peeking out the window.
The tag is part of the sentence, so you’d use a lowercase S for she. But if the tag were its own sentence, you’d capitalize the S.
“Is Bob in the car?” She peeked out the window.
2. What if the Dialogue is More Than One Sentence?
Follow the same rules. If the tag is part of the sentence, use a comma, question mark, or exclamation point followed by a lowercase letter. If separate sentences, use a period, question mark, or exclamation point followed by an uppercase letter.
“Bob left ten minutes ago,” he said. “You can still catch him.”
“Bob left ten minutes ago.” He looked out the window. “I think you can still catch him.”
There are also situations where the dialogue is broken by action, but the dialogue is all part of the same thought. In these cases, you’d use a comma followed by a lowercase letter, then another comma and lowercase letter.
“I think Bob left,” said Jane, peeking out the window, “but you might be able to catch him.”
The line “I think Bob left, but you might be able to catch him” is all one thought. The tag and action just splits it in two.
If the character is talking for a long time, as in a speech, the rules for quotation marks are a little different. You’d start the paragraph with quotation marks, but not use any to end it until the speech was done. For example:
“I’m tired of always being the last one to the car,” Bob said, gearing up for a long speech. “I’ve decided that I’m not going to do it anymore, and I’m going to head out first before anyone else has a chance.
“This might sound selfish, but it’s the only way I can maintain my sanity in this crazy, crazy world we find ourselves in.”
With both paragraphs being Bob’s speech, the first paragraph skips the end quotation mark, which shows readers the speech continues. This lets us break the dialogue into the proper paragraphs without it getting confusing for readers as to who is still speaking.
3. How Do You Show Interruptions?
If you need to show someone interrupting, use an em dash. An em dash is the long double hyphen looking thing —
“I’ll be in the—”
“Don’t start that again, Bob,” he said.
If the dialogue is broken, then continues, you’d use the em dashes same as you would commas.
“It looks like we have—” Bob checked his watch “—three hours.”
4. How Do You Show Trailing Speech?
If the dialogue trails off, use ellipses. An ellipse is the three periods in a row, no spaces between them …
Bob sighed. “I just thought…” That was his first mistake—thinking.
If only part of the dialogue is heard, you might denote walking in on a conversation, or only catching bits of it the same way.
“…wasn’t sure if he was going or not,” she whispered.
He pressed his ear against the door, straining to hear. “…thought maybe…but it wasn’t the same…get rid of…”
5. Does Punctuation Go Inside or Outside the Quotation Marks?
All the punctuation goes inside the quotation marks, unless there is a quote within the dialogue itself.
“He said he would be in the car,” Jane told her.
Jane giggled. “Did he really say,“I’ll be in the car?” (quoted dialogue within dialogue)
Jane hesitated. Did he really say, “I’ll be in the car”? (quoted dialogue within an internal thought)
If the quote within the dialogue is at the end of the sentence, the punctuation goes inside the quotation mark.
Jane giggled. “He said, “I’ll be in the car.”
With quotes, there is some debate between single and double quote marks. Personal taste and house style can affect this.
Jane giggled. “He said, ‘I’ll be in the car’.”
English is a weird language, so there are bound to be strange situations that require unusual punctuation, but these will work for most of your storytelling needs. When in doubt, refer to your favorite grammar guide or check online.
Do you have any dialogue punctuation questions?
A long-time fantasy reader, Janice Hardy always wondered about the darker side of healing. For her fantasy trilogy The Healing Wars, she tapped into her own dark side to create a world where healing was dangerous, and those with the best intentions often made the worst choices. Her novels include The Shifter, Blue Fire, and Darkfall from Balzer+Bray/Harper Collins. The Shifter, was chosen for the 2014 list of "Ten Books All Young Georgians Should Read" from the Georgia Center for the Book. It was also shortlisted for the Waterstones Children's Book Prize, and The Truman Award in 2011.
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