A sampling of articles on show vs. tell
- Send up the (Red) Flag: Telling Words That Often Spell Trouble
- I Told You: Mental Signposts That Tell, Not Show
- Don't Tell Me Why: Words That Often Tell, Not Show
- "When" Are You Telling? The Trouble with When Statements
- Do or Do Not. There is No Try: Clarifying What Your Characters Do
- It's Showtime! Show vs Tell
- Tell Me About it: When Telling is Better Than Showing
- How Far is Too Far? Far Narrative Distance vs Telling
- How to Include the Five Senses Without Falling into the Telling Trap
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I am sometimes have a problem with show and tell for the characters like the scene or the feelings.
ReplyDeleteJanice, great job on Show vs. Tell. I come from years of nonfiction and tech writing so I needed deep help on being coy with readers and trusting them rather than laying out the facts in full detail and sharp clarity. I wasn't really even good at seeing tells in my own attempts with fiction. Your depth was not overboard for me because I got so good at telling that showing was like a tricycle for a 3 year old. So thanks. I feel a lot better about it now. Think I'll have a look at my WIP now and try to find some tells I can fix... So glad I found your site. I need to look at POV and Voice as well because they figure in so importantly with show/tell. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm glad it worked for you and was able to help.
DeleteNow the tells jump out at me and I can use their correction as opportunities to enhance and extend the story as I convert them into dramatization. Maybe this novella I'm working on will grow up and become a novel.
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ReplyDeleteI am writing about an arranged marriage. In the story just now Lina who is the main character is in love with someone else. She does not want to marry a merman named Dylin. She wants to marry a merman named Zale. I am doing trying to do more showing instead of telling in the story. What are your thoughts on this?
Just keep your POV character in mind as you write. What does she see/hear/think/feel, etc. You're showing her story as she lives it, not describing what happens to her from far.
DeleteJanice, It is a love story and Oceane has the arranged marriage instead of Coralina. The story is going to be in present tense. since it is happening now. Coralina and Zale are going to go on a journey to find Marlena, her cousin who is kidnapped. what do you think?
ReplyDeleteSounds interesting and a lot of fun.
DeleteNice post thank you Trevor
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