A writer can do everything “right” and still have a novel that doesn’t engage readers.
I recently finished a novel by an author I like. Their previous series was wonderful and I eagerly dived into the new one, expecting to enjoy yet another exciting tale. Instead, I found a technically well-done novel that left me flat. From the reviews I later peeked at online, I’m not the only one who felt this way.
It was sad, because this author went from “auto-buy” to “wait and see the reviews” with one so-so book. And it didn’t have to happen.
Taste vary, of course (which is why I’m not sharing the title), but the first series was wonderful for several reasons:
1. An original premise done very well.
The concept was unique, and integral to the story itself. Solving the mystery, figuring out the truth, and seeing the protagonist grow was all interconnected and built upon each other to form the story.
2. A protagonist readers liked and rooted for.
All the characters were strong, even the ones you didn’t like (by design). But the protagonist was endearing and “skilled” in the premise concept, and their skills made you like them all the more.
3. An intriguing conflict that kept readers guessing.
Figuring out the truth behind the situation and even the world drove the plot and character arcs, and every clue revealed opened the door to more questions, and that kept you hooked. You wanted to know the answers because the questions were so fascinating.
4. An emotionally and intellectually satisfying resolution to that conflict.
Dangling a cool mystery for hundreds of pages is tricky, because the payoff doesn’t always live up to the hype. But this one did, and it worked perfectly with the protagonist’s growth as well as the plot itself.
With the exception of very plot-heavy novels, such as thrillers or procedurals, these four things appear in just about every satisfying read (and even the plot-heavy ones often hit these points anyway). It’s a mini-blueprint for “how to write a great novel.”
(Here’s more on hooking the reader's brain and heart)
Why This Book Didn’t Work
Easy. The second series failed on all four points.
1. The premise lacked originality, and much of it was concepts I’d seen many times in other stories.
This by itself isn’t necessarily a bad thing, but if you use an old idea, you’d better have something else really good to compensate. For example, I love a good underdog sports movie, but it has to have a setup that’s fun and characters I can like and root for, or it’s just another bunch of bland athletes with issues who pull it together and win.
These ideas weren’t bad, they just didn’t bring anything new to the premise. Had there been only one of them, the book probably would have been okay, but there were multiple “seen that before” pieces making up the story. Bu they felt added on to make a general idea “cool,” not a cool idea that drove the plot.
(Here’s more on exploring an idea vs. solving a problem)
2. The protagonists were blah, and had nothing special about them to make me care.
The protagonist’s “skills” weren’t unique or interesting, and even though they were good at them, the skills themselves didn’t really matter to the overall story. They worked as the right device to create the plot, but any number of things could have had the same outcome.
The characters also didn’t have enough personality to stand out as unique people, and at times, I forgot which POV I was in. Even their individual problems were basically the same, just with different details. For example, they were both “trying to escape a bad person trying to kill them,” and they both “were lying about who they were,” and they both “were afraid to tell anyone the truth.”
And again, there’s nothing wrong with any of those things, but how those concepts were played out in the story were also basically the same, further blurring the lines between these characters.
(Here’s more on making characters come alive)
3. The conflict didn’t matter, and it didn’t leave many story questions that weren’t easy to figure out.
For a book so focused on the “adventure,” this was a serious issue. But the adventure was barely more than a McGuffin story (where an object or device serves merely as a trigger for the plot), and I never understood the point of the McGuffin. It seemed as though everything everyone did (more or less), was to “get rich” and “avoid death.” Which didn’t leave much for the reader to worry about.
It also suffered from a “nowhere for the stakes to go” issue. The protagonists’ lives were in danger from Bad Guy X at the start, and they stayed that way all book. No escalated stakes, no reveals, no deeper personal connection to make things worse. So the story felt repetitive after a while, because it was just the same problem over and over with slightly different tactics to try to kill them. Again, that can work in the right story, but here, it wasn’t enough.
(Here’s more on asking the right story questions in a novel)
4. The ending was obvious, and then it wasn’t really sure what it wanted to be.
For a been-done idea with a straight-forward, low stakes plot, the secrets had to be huge to make this book work. But the “big reveals” were telegraphed from ten miles away and easy to figure out, so the characters looked like idiots for not figuring it out sooner.
Even worse, the secrets didn’t matter, since the point of those secrets held no real consequences and didn’t really affect the plot. One of them wasn’t even a secret to readers, but a “when will another character figure out who that protagonist really is?” question. And since the answer to that was also obvious, it didn’t work as a hook.
In the end, they survived, which wasn’t a surprise to anyone. The secrets were finally revealed (also not a surprise to readers), and a minor romance subplot for Protagonist A was pushed forward and felt like it was supposed to be the “win,” and even though it was nice, it held no emotional impact. Protagonist B’s win involved settling an old score and “escaping the bad guy.” Neither ending was satisfying or worth the time it took to get there.
(Here’s more on what makes a satisfying ending)
But here’s the thing…it was well written from a purely technical standpoint.
Which, as a writer, is terrifying. The writing was strong, with smooth prose, elegant description, and scenes with all the right goal-conflict-disaster elements. Yet it still failed to grab me as a reader.
If the author revealed this was their first book that they dusted off and sold after they’d hit the bestseller lists, I’d believe it. It has all the markings of a first novel before a writer found their voice and learned how to do more than illustrate a plot.
It’s a lackluster novel, but it doesn’t technically (in the literal sense) do anything wrong. It just lacks that spark that takes the description of action and turns into a story readers connect with.
Craft and writing skill is important, but so is the intangible spark that turns a plot into a story. It’s not just about getting the text perfect, but about building a story that surprises readers and draws them into that story.
Because a well-written novel can still fail if it doesn’t have that spark.
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Janice Hardy is the award-winning author of the teen fantasy trilogy The Healing Wars, including The Shifter, Blue Fire, and Darkfall from Balzer+Bray/Harper Collins. The Shifter, was chosen for the 2014 list of "Ten Books All Young Georgians Should Read" from the Georgia Center for the Book. It was also shortlisted for the Waterstones Children's Book Prize (2011), and The Truman Award (2011).
She also writes the Grace Harper urban fantasy series for adults under the name, J.T. Hardy.
She's the founder of Fiction University and has written multiple books on writing, including Understanding Show, Don't Tell (And Really Getting It), Plotting Your Novel: Ideas and Structure, and the Revising Your Novel: First Draft to Finished Draft series.