tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post8449880558604702312..comments2024-03-17T06:03:00.362-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Real Life Diagnostics: Show vs. TellJanice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-45258604690247721792010-05-21T23:19:30.879-04:002010-05-21T23:19:30.879-04:00Wow. Thank you for this very helpful post. We ofte...Wow. Thank you for this very helpful post. We often hear about showing and not telling, but to see very specific examples like this is instructive. I'm bookmarking this!Karenninahttp://www.karenninaposa.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-16186666548180266412010-05-20T20:50:45.169-04:002010-05-20T20:50:45.169-04:00This is a huge help! It really made me think about...This is a huge help! It really made me think about things in a different way. Thank you so much for doing this, Janice, and for Amanda for offering her work.justJoanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10377292351547511489noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-68061154217603693572010-05-19T10:07:32.626-04:002010-05-19T10:07:32.626-04:00Thanks for those, Janice. "Show, don't te...Thanks for those, Janice. "Show, don't tell" is not only the commonest piece of writing advice, but also the trickiest to follow and parse in the trenches. Great stuff: you have a gift for clarity and cutting to the heart of an issue.<br /><br />Kudos also to Amanda for her bravery!<br /><br />DarioAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-83800145788296818662010-05-19T06:50:42.281-04:002010-05-19T06:50:42.281-04:00My apologies, I thought they were spam. I have no ...My apologies, I thought they were spam. I have no problem with anonymous postings, but those looked suspicious with the links to what looked like ad sites prominently displayed, and very simple generic comments on both here and my other blog in the same minute, and no profile info (those three things said spam to me). I won't do it again if you're a real reader making real comments.Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-19969367827513438872010-05-19T00:01:06.715-04:002010-05-19T00:01:06.715-04:00Janice, why did you delete my two comments? Scalzi...Janice, why did you delete my two comments? Scalzi and Stross never delete my comments. Where do you live, Arizona? So, if I post anonymously, you'll delete it, without question, that it? So, can I buy your books without your permission, or not?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-69103292050771140142010-05-18T10:11:19.751-04:002010-05-18T10:11:19.751-04:00I fell between the lines of this and engorged myse...I fell between the lines of this and engorged myself on the lesson here. Thank you! This explained so much. I'm looking at my writing in a whole new way. (Hugs)IndigoSage Ravenwoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17143502548162174269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-30559769089642680372010-05-18T07:28:01.651-04:002010-05-18T07:28:01.651-04:00Thanks all, and double thanks to Amanda for allowi...Thanks all, and double thanks to Amanda for allowing me to fiddle with her work :)I'm glad everyone found it helpful.Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-62344572468495921712010-05-18T07:07:25.977-04:002010-05-18T07:07:25.977-04:00Excellent stuff, Janice. I learned a great dealExcellent stuff, Janice. I learned a great dealGlen Akinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09647296775230237162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-84838384060114009932010-05-18T00:19:33.441-04:002010-05-18T00:19:33.441-04:00WOW, great idea Janice, you showing us through som...WOW, great idea Janice, you showing us through something like this makes a huge difference. Thank you! Bravo brave volunteer. Its an interesting passage. I hope we get more of these as I find them very helpful.Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-64910808537527278052010-05-17T22:28:47.545-04:002010-05-17T22:28:47.545-04:00Wow, that really helps me to see what to do in my ...Wow, that really helps me to see what to do in my own work. I'm glad you volunteered, Amanda. That's one of my problem areas, too.Jaleh Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04942272578488986874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-55465217776218321462010-05-17T21:06:18.287-04:002010-05-17T21:06:18.287-04:00Wow - that was great. Loved the scene & the co...Wow - that was great. Loved the scene & the comments. Really helps us see how to analyze and change a scene. Thanks so much!Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-676225968134846732010-05-17T15:29:29.749-04:002010-05-17T15:29:29.749-04:00Thanks for volunteering, Amanda, and thanks, Ms. H...Thanks for volunteering, Amanda, and thanks, Ms. Hardy, for taking the time to revise it! (I know how long that takes.)Carradeehttp://mistiwolanski.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-41130465557596778002010-05-17T15:16:35.668-04:002010-05-17T15:16:35.668-04:00Thanks, Natalie. Let's hope the the revision ...Thanks, Natalie. Let's hope the the revision is even better :)<br /><br />I linked back to this off of my LiveJournal.Amandahttp://out-totheblack.livejournal.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-58694936565801017702010-05-17T14:58:13.006-04:002010-05-17T14:58:13.006-04:00Thanks Amanda for being the volunteer. I enjoyed y...Thanks Amanda for being the volunteer. I enjoyed your passage even before the revisions. I struggle with this too and found Janice's revisions helpful.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-52271665531145019702010-05-17T12:11:33.257-04:002010-05-17T12:11:33.257-04:00Great post; very instructive. Thanks also to the b...Great post; very instructive. Thanks also to the brave volunteer >:)<br /><br /><a href="http://cold-as-heaven.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow"> Cold As Heaven </a>CA Heavenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07558100567878233142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-67657950313115045312010-05-17T10:43:25.176-04:002010-05-17T10:43:25.176-04:00Great insight...things I hadn't really conside...Great insight...things I hadn't really considered before. Thank you! :)Helena Carlohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16857055504285215017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-17475046616871694782010-05-17T10:42:44.392-04:002010-05-17T10:42:44.392-04:00Wow what a great workout session here! Thanks for ...Wow what a great workout session here! Thanks for posting so we can all learn!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-29429244692190000212010-05-17T09:55:49.278-04:002010-05-17T09:55:49.278-04:00Hi, I'm your first victim...um, volunteer.
T...Hi, I'm your first victim...um, volunteer. <br /><br />Thanks for the great feed back. I totally appreciate it. This is the fine tuning that I need to learn; the hardest part being recognizing it in the first place. I totally agree with your assessment and I'd love to re-post my changes. <br /><br />I posted a bit of another section on my LJ last week and got some feed back on that. I'm of the opinion that if you don't put it out there, you don't learn nuthin :)Amandahttp://out-totheblack.livejournal.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-53543171160247760742010-05-17T08:57:51.758-04:002010-05-17T08:57:51.758-04:00Thanks for the analysis (and to the author who was...Thanks for the analysis (and to the author who was willing to share). It makes me think about my own writing in a completely different way.Andrea Mackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15250681746122381149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-40704993118027260822010-05-17T08:18:57.902-04:002010-05-17T08:18:57.902-04:00Thanks so much for this. What an awesome teaching ...Thanks so much for this. What an awesome teaching tool! Thanks to the writer who volunteered this piece. Very brave.Penhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06605428306080473273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-67157061858876436632010-05-17T07:34:35.979-04:002010-05-17T07:34:35.979-04:00Keep up the good work! I invite you to see my post...Keep up the good work! I invite you to see my post, I hope you will find interesting too.Radu Prisacaruhttp://www.raduprisacaru.comnoreply@blogger.com