tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post8323409404056353869..comments2024-03-27T10:02:56.747-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Real Life Diagnostic: Using Narrative Focus to Strengthen ScenesJanice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-4400115812833811002010-06-10T14:36:11.598-04:002010-06-10T14:36:11.598-04:00Thanks ever so much!Thanks ever so much!Story Weaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01365323743173762207noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-42476059442741989312010-06-10T12:01:47.054-04:002010-06-10T12:01:47.054-04:00Huh.
Hm.
Er.
Handy.
:D I've already had c...Huh.<br /><br />Hm.<br /><br />Er.<br /><br />Handy.<br /><br />:D I've already had critiques tell me that I'm prone to info-dumps, usually just a paragraph here and there. This might be why. I'll be chewing on that cud, thanks.Carradeenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-3710522299331830862010-06-10T06:37:27.282-04:002010-06-10T06:37:27.282-04:00Most welcome all :) Story Weaver, odds are you can...Most welcome all :) Story Weaver, odds are you can cut your prologue and it will improve your story. The reader doesn't need to know how your character got biter, just that he is. Maybe that info will come out naturally somewhere else in the story, at a time where the reader is curious about the character's past.<br /><br />Best way to do that is to have something trigger a memory of what happened. Not a full on flashback or anything, but something that causes your character to think "oh no, this was just like when Dad was killed by rabid wombats." <br /><br />I've actually been planning a backstory/infodump post, so I'll do something that goes into more detail next week. <br /><br />Some earlier posts that might also help:<br />http://storyflip.blogspot.com/2010/02/talking-about-past.html<br /><br />http://storyflip.blogspot.com/2010/01/back-story-of-our-lives.html<br /><br />http://storyflip.blogspot.com/2009/03/dont-sweat-small-stuff-week-back-story.htmlJanice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-1766750266807173762010-06-10T00:24:27.907-04:002010-06-10T00:24:27.907-04:00I really liked this one a lot. You clearly illustr...I really liked this one a lot. You clearly illustrate how to keep coning down the focus.Ronda Laveenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03902846545309643023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-53274945509868841712010-06-09T20:31:51.790-04:002010-06-09T20:31:51.790-04:00Thank you just doesn't seem like enough, but i...Thank you just doesn't seem like enough, but it's all I've got. THANK YOUStephanie, PQWhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07829560196963801967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-36076348635691445962010-06-09T20:17:07.731-04:002010-06-09T20:17:07.731-04:00Ah, on the subject of backstory; I'm trying to...Ah, on the subject of backstory; I'm trying to revise my prologue because it provides vital information about how the character got bitter, lost his family, ect. But the problem is that it doesn't focus on the main dilema that drives the whole story. It sticks out, frankly. Do I need this info, or can I just dump it? Any clever ideas how I can recall those evnts without leaving the story?Story Weaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01365323743173762207noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-63128758979017156832010-06-09T10:09:15.773-04:002010-06-09T10:09:15.773-04:00Thanks to Janice and our brave author. You really...Thanks to Janice and our brave author. You really did catch my attention with your opening paragraphs and my mind did wander off when you did. I really wanted to know what was going to happen with the bullies. Thanks for volunteering your work.<br /><br />I like Janice's idea of Bo going camando :)Amandahttp://out-totheblack.livejournal.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-74064436234482856072010-06-09T10:07:38.722-04:002010-06-09T10:07:38.722-04:00I adore these live diagnostics. Now we have a comb...I adore these live diagnostics. Now we have a combination of your great ability to explain as well as an example to apply it to - there's concrete passages that this information is working with, it makes it easier to remember and gives a whole new level of understanding.<br /><br />I really enjoyed this post on narrative focus, I have a character who wanders (and is supposed to) but this connecting all his wondering thoughts to one main idea just gave me a couple brilliant ideas of my own.<br /><br />To the author who submitted this. Great opening. It was entertaining and very sweet.Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-33888814173633664652010-06-09T08:58:42.974-04:002010-06-09T08:58:42.974-04:00Another great post. You always explain things so w...Another great post. You always explain things so well and the live diagnostics really helped illustrate the point (cute little opening, btw.)<br /><br />And I think it's more than fine to lack a bit of narrative focus while talking :)Nomeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07995363401476834241noreply@blogger.com