tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post5932215929612662952..comments2024-03-27T10:02:56.747-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Real Life Diagnostics: Do You Get Her? Are the Character and Motivations Coming Through? Janice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-9375213619105524202013-06-12T03:52:24.449-04:002013-06-12T03:52:24.449-04:00I felt Kyra was a good or interesting person riski... I felt Kyra was a good or interesting person risking something major for it, then I'd want to see where it went and what will happen to her.<a href="http://www.goutinankle.com" rel="nofollow">gout in ankle</a>Ridahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02405619882350094230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-49692641841592562092013-01-14T02:58:46.147-05:002013-01-14T02:58:46.147-05:00Great post and thanks for the information. Politic...Great post and thanks for the information. Politics is definitely a sticky subject for many to grasp or even understand. However, it is still among the leading hot topics of our time. I appreciate your post and look forward to more. <br /><a href="http://www.howcanigetpregnant.us/" rel="nofollow">how do i get pregnant</a> l <a href="http://www.loverhost.co.uk/" rel="nofollow">Find me Lover</a><br /><br /><br /><br />ANWAR KHANhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10168761574964870014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-75689416392487762092012-10-19T06:08:58.280-04:002012-10-19T06:08:58.280-04:00By doing this you train yourself to want to comple...By doing this you train yourself to want to complete the goals and tasks as quickly and efficiently as possible, you will work hard to complete your goals, get the reward and move on the next. Always remember though, make sure you do the job well, you don’t want to have to go back and redo the task you already thought was finished.<a href="https://www.carlmontpharmacy.com/stugil.html" rel="nofollow">https://www.carlmontpharmacy.com/stugil.html<br /></a>Ridahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02405619882350094230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-47057391994535188262012-10-02T12:52:23.322-04:002012-10-02T12:52:23.322-04:00This is perfect timing--I've struggled with th...This is perfect timing--I've struggled with this very thing in my YA fantasy. <br /> <br />I learned too late that I couldn't just rely on cool fantasy elements in my writing...there has to be a good story, a sequential plot, and realistic character motivations to make the cool fantasy elements believable to readers. <br /><br />This really helps me as I revise and continue to fix the story problems in my manuscript. Thanks as always, Janice! The Writer Librarianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05532839053876490957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-83948162895616028032012-09-24T09:54:55.884-04:002012-09-24T09:54:55.884-04:00AJ, you'll like Monday's post then :) I de...AJ, you'll like Monday's post then :) I decided to elaborate on that. <br /><br />Glacier, most welcome, glad I was able to help! <br /><br />Vero, aw, thanks :) Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-84261457555571702592012-09-23T02:32:31.510-04:002012-09-23T02:32:31.510-04:00Brilliant critique! (You can tell I'm becoming...Brilliant critique! (You can tell I'm becoming a really huge fan of ya, right? ;)) <br /><br />Since you've already hit all possible nails straight on the head, the only thing I might add is that an opening must cannot afford to be subtle. The reader has no idea who the characters are, what anything is, and so things must be spelled out clearly, not hinted at. Subtlety is something to be used much later in a story. :)Veronica Sicoehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03741318844378921184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-64895872459086221002012-09-22T23:44:06.213-04:002012-09-22T23:44:06.213-04:00Janice,
Thank you, thank you for the amazing and ...Janice,<br /><br />Thank you, thank you for the amazing and thorough critique. I've been concerned whether this opening started in the right spot or revealed Kyra's character. Your edits make so much sense. I can't wait to apply them. <br /><br />After you mention it, you are right, this does feel more like a second scene because it truly is. If I keep this opening spot, I will definitely fix this. I know the scene before this, but the reader doesn't. <br /><br />My original opening started with the errand that lead Kyra to the stone. Decisions, decisions, but great advice to apply.<br /><br />I appreciate your time and wisdom!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03683787289610071946noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-70810061160788584922012-09-22T20:19:38.676-04:002012-09-22T20:19:38.676-04:00"She's reaching for the door and her fing..."She's reaching for the door and her fingers are trembling. Her fingers aren't doing it on their own. It's a subtle change but it affects how close the reader feels to the POV." This little gem has really clicked for me. Making the fingers 'act/feel' rather than the character. Wow. Now I want to go over my MS to check if I did this! Thanks Janice!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17961489299769954315noreply@blogger.com