tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post4370952876484914553..comments2024-03-27T10:02:56.747-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Real Life Diagnostics: Show Me Your Mind: Deepening Your POVJanice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-81034591069283421822012-03-22T08:42:37.104-04:002012-03-22T08:42:37.104-04:00I found the comments on the original text very use...I found the comments on the original text very useful. Inventing curse vocabulary is a good way around the problem.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-72634900267755646522012-03-12T07:25:09.261-04:002012-03-12T07:25:09.261-04:00Excellent advice.Excellent advice.Traci Kenworthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07336373871521363649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-57017922002087565452012-03-12T01:30:22.050-04:002012-03-12T01:30:22.050-04:00Anonymous, thanks for the comment. When I rewrite...Anonymous, thanks for the comment. When I rewrite it, I'll have to make sure its as clear as possible. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.Samnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-64850397835233644412012-03-12T01:16:08.301-04:002012-03-12T01:16:08.301-04:00Wow! The comments made a strong passage even stron...Wow! The comments made a strong passage even stronger.<br />My only quibble was that as the entrance was covered in vines (suggesting nobody had been there for ages), how was it that there were lit candles within the passage?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-57149179399355449572012-03-12T00:41:18.761-04:002012-03-12T00:41:18.761-04:00Sarah, thanks for the comment. Your point about th...Sarah, thanks for the comment. Your point about the swearing was really interesting.<br /><br />Janice, this was bloody awesome, thank you so much. How you laid it out made it so easy for me to understand what you were talking about.Samnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-62333629164646754592012-03-11T17:17:56.127-04:002012-03-11T17:17:56.127-04:00Janice has given such excellent feedback here. Th...Janice has given such excellent feedback here. The only thing I could add is a personal response as a reader - I don't mind foul language, and I can see it is relevant to your character. But here it feels little over done. Or perhaps that's just me. It was several years ago when I was advised by a publisher to remove all the swear words from my manuscript - obviously that doesn't count now! But vulgarity still has power, if not overused. That last fuck, and "those scumbags" just tipped the balance for me and took away the power of the words. Just my opinion. Otherwise, good job.sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03818420999930644450noreply@blogger.com