tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post3558384529478124202..comments2024-03-17T06:03:00.362-04:00Comments on Fiction University: How to Write Thrilling Action Scenes Janice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-51491156281350592632017-11-08T10:42:30.072-05:002017-11-08T10:42:30.072-05:00Thank you for reading it and coming by to comment,...Thank you for reading it and coming by to comment, Deb! As always, it's just advice and I hope other writers like you will feel free to adjust it as you see fit. Vincent H. O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17712074690139274480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-50010645730516794272017-11-08T09:48:15.561-05:002017-11-08T09:48:15.561-05:00This is very helpful for fleshing out a scene I’m ...This is very helpful for fleshing out a scene I’m working on right now. Thanks for the insights, Vincent, and for bringing the article to us, Janice!Deb Bazinethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17688312643654356404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-89414558254122254952017-11-07T16:15:24.859-05:002017-11-07T16:15:24.859-05:00Thank you so much for reading my post, and I'm...Thank you so much for reading my post, and I'm glad you liked it. It sounds like you're very familiar with writing these scenes already, so hopefully your "newbies" will find it helpful.<br /><br />VinnyVincent H. O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17712074690139274480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-21023232841656618602017-11-07T16:13:42.265-05:002017-11-07T16:13:42.265-05:00Hi Robyn! Thanks for commenting, and for reading m...Hi Robyn! Thanks for commenting, and for reading my post.<br /><br />I don't pretend to have all the answers, and I'm careful not to tell other writers how to do things. With that said, I will try to answer the question.<br /><br />I think it's fantastic that you already have all of the actions and reactions of this fight sequence, because it means you know the whole fight all the way through. <br /><br />As I mentioned above, the "action-reaction" technique can give the readers the sense of being in the fight while also telling them what's happening. So there's nothing wrong with leaving it the way it is.<br /><br />I think the question to ask is: Does this scene feel like a fight? If it does, then there's no need to explore taking things out. If it doesn't, perhaps cutting it down a little might help.<br /><br />If you have time, you might try re-writing the scene with some of the action-reaction removed and see if you feel it works better. The only drawback to that approach is that changing one segment can throw off the tenor and tone of the rest of the story, so if you do make the change it's important to read the segments before and after the edited scene to make sure it still flows. <br /><br />You as the writer will know which one works. <br /><br />I hope that was helpful.<br /><br />VinnyVincent H. O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17712074690139274480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-15449932396024582502017-11-07T13:18:53.281-05:002017-11-07T13:18:53.281-05:00This is a great post to add to my resource file fo...This is a great post to add to my resource file for the newbies I edit. Close quarters action is always tough to write, keeping the balance between what you show and what is assumed.<br /><br />I have a favorite example of internal dialogue during a fight, which I found in a first-time novel: "Wow! That hurt!" :O)<br /><br />Thanks so much for sharing Vincent, and Glory Main looks like a book my nephew will inhale.Maria D'Marcohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07909374867721777133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-43130493245991840912017-11-07T12:57:33.113-05:002017-11-07T12:57:33.113-05:00Loved it. I have two novels with action scenes. Th...Loved it. I have two novels with action scenes. This comes at a great time for me. Thanks to the both of you. <br /><br />Question for you. Should I show every step of the middle school fight? Just the important steps?Right now, I have it laid out showing every blow and the reaction from the protag and the bully.Robyn Campbellhttp://robyncampbell.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-1651105933875724392017-11-07T10:21:35.580-05:002017-11-07T10:21:35.580-05:00Thanks so much for inviting me, Janice! I hope eve...Thanks so much for inviting me, Janice! I hope everyone enjoys my post, and that they'll browse the other great offerings here Fiction University.Vincent H. O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17712074690139274480noreply@blogger.com