tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post1893649101165097225..comments2024-03-27T10:02:56.747-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Real Life Diagnostics: Hooking the Reader From the StartJanice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-28701561368605659602011-09-01T10:23:52.064-04:002011-09-01T10:23:52.064-04:00Thanks so much :) That's means a lot to me.Thanks so much :) That's means a lot to me.Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-34687968631174897592011-08-31T19:59:19.307-04:002011-08-31T19:59:19.307-04:00Janice... you rock. Without a doubt you are the bi...Janice... you rock. Without a doubt you are the biggest key to my growth as a writer. What can I say, but thank you for all you do!<br /><br />Thx for the comments ya-all.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-83402773187543481532011-08-31T08:32:19.741-04:002011-08-31T08:32:19.741-04:00Michael, oh, good, I'm glad they help. Real li...Michael, oh, good, I'm glad they help. Real life examples always seem to make things more clear.<br /><br />Pete, good point! I tend to go with what sounds better to my ear and let the copy editor figure it out ;)Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-33762495015557115092011-08-27T17:59:39.324-04:002011-08-27T17:59:39.324-04:00I never know what to say about an opening I really...I never know what to say about an opening I really like besides, `great opening, I'd love to know what happens next.' So that's what I'll say. :)Chicoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16504144663440678542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-81523181237004163082011-08-27T12:36:45.545-04:002011-08-27T12:36:45.545-04:00Janice does such a good job polishing and tighteni...Janice does such a good job polishing and tightening that it makes me want to go back over every line I ever wrote again. However, there comes a time to move on. <br />One thing she doesn't point out is the all too common use of objective rather than nominative case in the phrase, "Could this be him?" <br />Today, people use "him" so commonly in this phrase, rather than the proper "he" that one might leave it. In fact, the proper use of "he" is now so uncommon that it sounds awkward or pretentious. My own inner conflict forces me to avoid such usage altogether.<br />Cheers,<br />PeteThe Forward Observerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09695887195193379560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-46971695677725398462011-08-27T10:12:31.276-04:002011-08-27T10:12:31.276-04:00Great revision, anonymous author. I love it that w...Great revision, anonymous author. I love it that we are now in the action, where before it was mainly thought combined with backstory and description. Sweet! <br /><br />These diagnostics are so valuable, Janice. I am learning so much, particularly about how to deepen POV. Thank you for your time in doing them.Michael G-Ghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07947421844294471304noreply@blogger.com