tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post1287086760614551446..comments2024-03-17T06:03:00.362-04:00Comments on Fiction University: Pickup Lines: The One-Line SummaryJanice Hardyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-4423989324920850952021-07-12T13:59:50.953-04:002021-07-12T13:59:50.953-04:00Most welcome. Glad you found it helpful :)Most welcome. Glad you found it helpful :)Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-24158003406208111082021-07-11T17:53:45.626-04:002021-07-11T17:53:45.626-04:00Thanks for sharing this formula. I am starting to ...Thanks for sharing this formula. I am starting to write novels and, as people in my country say, this information is worth gold! Thank you very much, Greetings from Ecuador.Lizbeth Morenohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17678633714331314818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-43030887517335501202011-06-22T08:08:47.755-04:002011-06-22T08:08:47.755-04:00Thanks all!
Jami: That's so true about the ho...Thanks all!<br /><br />Jami: That's so true about the hook. I love that! Nya does use her power in the first scene, and by the end of the first act is her sister disappearing.<br /><br />Marilyn: I love having two pitches like that. What fantastic advice. I often get people asking me if my book is "like Harry Potter" since that's the only reference they ave for children's fantasy. <br /><br />Nicole: I'll check that out, thanks. Probably a great learning experience. I figured out how to write a query from reading Miss Snark's contests. You see enough bad ones you get a feel for what a good one sounds like.Janice Hardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02356672149097741248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-5896951515034670982011-06-18T22:53:33.352-04:002011-06-18T22:53:33.352-04:00Excellent suggestion for turning the logline into ...Excellent suggestion for turning the logline into a verbal response. Thanks Janice!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-5507355691055087432011-06-18T17:31:16.468-04:002011-06-18T17:31:16.468-04:00GREAT post, Janice - many thanks!
RobynGREAT post, Janice - many thanks! <br />RobynRobyn Hood Blackhttp://www.robynhoodblack.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-33662533175656717442011-06-17T16:31:14.144-04:002011-06-17T16:31:14.144-04:00Another great topic, Janice! Thanks for calling ou...Another great topic, Janice! Thanks for calling out the distinction between a written one-line pitch and a verbal one. The approaches can be subtlely different, and I hadn't thought about that before.<br /><br />If you haven't seen it already, check out last month's Twitter pitch contest at Sisters in Scribe(May 6 post). There are some awesome examples on one liners.Nicolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680066584646789184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-63852206641024436132011-06-17T15:19:54.786-04:002011-06-17T15:19:54.786-04:00Very simple and doable.Very simple and doable.Mynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07595087387069634003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-70097129549316015392011-06-17T13:02:06.127-04:002011-06-17T13:02:06.127-04:00It's also handy to have a one or two sentence ...It's also handy to have a one or two sentence description that is aimed at particular types of people you talk to. <br /><br />For example if I'm talking to a person who loves media science fiction but isn't a big reader, I describe THE ONCE AND FUTURE QUEEN as a classic STAR TREK style novel but with a ship of scientists who are first responders to planetary disasters who face a powerful alien hellbent on destroying a human colony. <br /><br />If the person is into re-inacting, I talk about the planet which was settled by SCA-types who recreated a fantasy-style kingdom of nobility, castles, and horses.Marilynn Byerlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16720129999636676998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-59518179914592652252011-06-17T12:12:28.080-04:002011-06-17T12:12:28.080-04:00Ooo yes! I'm finishing up a proposal workshop...Ooo yes! I'm finishing up a proposal workshop class right now, and we started with a one-sentence description of the premise. It was hard at first, because I kept trying to make it more "hooky" or logline-ish. But the answer to the "what's your book about" question has a slightly different focus.<br /><br />The instructor mentioned that this premise statement should be clear and explained within the first couple of chapters. In contrast, loglines will often include information about the climax or details of mid-point complications.<br /><br />So I'd bet that by the end of your first couple of chapters, we'd see your protagonist use her ability, see how it's unique, learn about her sister, and see her get into trouble. :)<br /><br />Here's what I came up with for mine so far:<br />My story is about a stay-at-home mom who stumbles into a secret society of immortal guardians and must defy the power-hungry traitor in their midst.<br /><br />It's not perfect, but it's better than what I had. :)Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-24011352204711125732011-06-17T11:53:46.752-04:002011-06-17T11:53:46.752-04:00Thanks for the formula. And the example. Very help...Thanks for the formula. And the example. Very helpful.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3901370917824739259.post-32911476829804069742011-06-17T10:36:36.268-04:002011-06-17T10:36:36.268-04:00Awesome Janice! This is a great formula, timely to...Awesome Janice! This is a great formula, timely too I'm working on this right now. I also LOVE your clever blog title :)Angela Cothranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09243582290698922119noreply@blogger.com